Quote (Razzattack @ Aug 6 2011 10:26am)
Don't say 私の名前は, it's understood via context that you're talking about yourself and should be omitted; if not, it sounds clunky and a little strange. Just say こんいちは。ブランドンです。
Try reversing your name too; you should only either use your second name and not your first name, or use your seond name followed by the first. You shouldn't just use your first (I'm assuming Brandon is your first name only because I've only ever heard it as one).
初めまして 「はじめまして」 sounds much better in an introduction that こんにちは as the former is used as a first time greeting.
Adding 'よろしくお願いします' 「よろしくおねがいします」 after an introduction is also probably something you should do. It's asking the other person to treat you kindly.
For very formal ocassions, you might want to consider replacing 'です' with 'と申します' 「ともします」 when introducing yourself, also. Obviously that's not needed here, but just a thought.
e/ Hope you don't think I'm being too critical, just trying to help.
Well I think he did ok for beginners, and another thing I would add is '皆さんどのようにお過ごしですか？' would be the proper way to ask, How is everyone doing today? in a polite way.
It's almost like you used google translator, I would just say こんにちわ、nikefreakです。宜しくお願いします or just よろしく～ when speaking with friends.
This post was edited by nikefreak01 on Aug 7 2011 01:48am