Quote (LadyKaya @ Jan 15 2010 05:03pm)

If you rag on those who make rhymes,
You must learn how to keep time.
Rhythm is as important as the rhyme,
Otherwise you're just wasting time.

And before you start to yell and scream,
Please pick a single rhyming scheme.
Figure out a simple pattern,
Or complex like rings on Saturn.

Quote (ZeusPwnsAll @ Jan 15 2010 05:20pm)

Bad simile.

As for the scheme, it all depends how you read it.

Read it as a wall of text and it sucks.
Put some rhythm into the voice and the scheme falls in. My shits outlined.

Quote (LadyKaya @ Jan 15 2010 05:28pm)

It may have been a bad simile, but if you read through your poem...yeah, you have 2 different rhyme schemes and a bit of a sonnet.
Post wisely.

Quote (ZeusPwnsAll @ Jan 15 2010 05:31pm)

Yeah, the schemes change a little but it sounds fine with flow.

I hate rap and poetry, by the way.

Quote (LadyKaya @ Jan 15 2010 03:33pm)

I hate rap, but I like poetry.
I don't like music that sounds like shit

Quote (LadyKaya @ 15 Jan 2010 22:33)

I hate rap, but I like poetry.
I don't like music that sounds like shit

Quote (ImLiljj @ Jan 15 2010 05:24pm)

Metal

Quote (Karkov @ Jan 15 2010 05:14pm)

I hate some rock songs.. like emo and screamo.. but that doesn't mean I hate all rock music.

Quote (LadyKaya @ Jan 15 2010 09:03pm)

If you rag on those who make rhymes,
You must learn how to keep time.
Rhythm is as important as the rhyme,
Otherwise you're just wasting time.

And before you start to yell and scream,
Please pick a single rhyming scheme.
Figure out a simple pattern,
Or complex like rings on Saturn.

Quote (Goukakyou @ Jan 16 2010 12:55am)

@ me?

u cant be serious
that just makes me furious