ok, so I made this poem (in norwegian) when I was like 12 or 13 years old.. So please consider this, and this is kinda the only poem I wrote so..
Please give serious feedback.. It would be funny

So here it is in norwegian:

Det er dager
som er fylt med lys.
Det er dager
som er gylt med skygge.
Skyggens dag er den farlige.

På skyggens dag
må du motstå det mørke.
Er du ikke sterk nok,
kan du gi opp.
Men det må ikke skje.

Jeg skal ikke senkes
ned i jorden,
uten å motstå.
Men den dag dette skjer,
skal mitt hode stå høyt.


and the translated version goes something like this:

There are days
that are filled with light.
There are days
that are filled with shadow.
The day of the shadow is the dangerous one.

On the day of the shadow
you must resist the darkness.
If you are not strong enough,
you may yield.
But that must not happen. ("must not be allowed to happen" = better?)

I shall not be lowered
into the ground,
without resisting.
But the day that this happens,
my head will stand high.

This post was edited by Dragon_Reborn on Jun 24 2007 04:12pm

Wot owns

the poems meh

This post was edited by Conri on Jun 25 2007 03:28am

i don't like it. poems that don't rhyme need a good ending line, and that one just doesn't do it for me

are you even able to make sense of the meaning of the ending line compared to the whole poem?

I would like somebody to try an analysis on this

i dont like poetry.

then why write here?

Semms pretty good, I only speak English so i can't read the origional, but its ok.

I didnt really like =/