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Apr 22 2014 06:58am
alrite so i have my ideya written down i have never wrote a book before etc i just started its not much not even a page but does this catch your eye

im sure its filled with spelling errors etc but lmk what you think im looking to see if some lines dont make sense etc i also dont reed to menny books eather

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The Forest is silent, for a human aproches a young woman carrying a bundle. Animals Silently watching from the entangled trees. The young woman is breething heavaly as if being watched the animals could hear her heart beeting violently. She places the bundle on the ground and quickly walks away without looking back. Wolfs gather around, the scent of human blood fills the air. Screeming starts coming from the bundle a newborn human baby. Startled the wolfs back off the pack leader Ulric takes the initiative and inside a blood coverd baby. Ulric walks back to his pack Accalia the Alpha female wolf of the pack ask's what will we do with the human child. We will leve it, it's none of our concern Accalia yells we cant leve this helpless child it will surly not survive the night. Ulric replies and what will you have me do with it we cannot care for a human did you forget what they did to this forrest i can not forgive them. Accalia replies with heartbreak i will not let you become a monster if we where to leve this child we would be no different from the humans you hate so much, yes the humans did great damage to our forest and killed menny of our kin but this child is inocent and noes nothing of this world. i beg you let me care for this child. Ulric irritated fine but the human is your responsibility i will have no part in caring for it. Accalia takes the child to her den awaiting are her two pups Cana and Raff. What is that mother Raff ask's, This is your new brother Accalia replies. But mother what is it and it smells Cana ses. This is what you call a Human they are much different from us they can not care for themselves untill there much older so you will need to help me look after him now what shall we call him how about Yuk.
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Apr 22 2014 09:40am
Quote (serpin @ Apr 22 2014 07:58am)
alrite so i have my ideya written down i have never wrote a book before etc i just started its not much not even a page but does this catch your eye

im sure its filled with spelling errors etc but lmk what you think im looking to see if some lines dont make sense etc i also dont reed to menny books eather

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The Forest is silent, for a human aproches a young woman carrying a bundle. Animals Silently watching from the entangled trees. The young woman is breething heavaly as if being watched the animals could hear her heart beeting violently. She places the bundle on the ground and quickly walks away without looking back. Wolfs gather around, the scent of human blood fills the air. Screeming starts coming from the bundle a newborn human baby. Startled the wolfs back off the pack leader Ulric takes the initiative and inside a blood coverd baby. Ulric walks back to his pack Accalia the Alpha female wolf of the pack ask's what will we do with the human child. We will leve it, it's none of our concern Accalia yells we cant leve this helpless child it will surly not survive the night. Ulric replies and what will you have me do with it we cannot care for a human did you forget what they did to this forrest i can not forgive them. Accalia replies with heartbreak i will not let you become a monster if we where to leve this child we would be no different from the humans you hate so much, yes the humans did great damage to our forest and killed menny of our kin but this child is inocent and noes nothing of this world. i beg you  let me care for this child. Ulric irritated fine but the human is your responsibility i will have no part in caring for it. Accalia takes the child to her den awaiting are her two pups Cana and Raff. What is that mother Raff ask's, This is your new brother Accalia replies. But mother what is it and it smells Cana ses. This is what you call a Human they are much different from us they can not care for themselves untill there much older so you will need to help me look after him now what shall we call him how about Yuk.


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Apr 22 2014 12:15pm
um a little confused was that a compliment or basicly this sucks?

sorry im not used to the book section of this website
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Apr 22 2014 06:55pm
Quote (serpin @ 22 Apr 2014 19:15)
um a little confused was that a compliment or basicly this sucks?

sorry im not used to the book section of this website


I'd suggest working on your spelling and basic grammar if you want to be an author.
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Apr 22 2014 07:00pm
Quote (hATemOnkEy @ Apr 22 2014 08:55pm)
I'd suggest working on your spelling and basic grammar if  you want to be an author.

i was gonna say "that's what editors are for", but holy hell.

Quote (serpin @ Apr 22 2014 08:58am)
alrite so i have my ideya written down i have never wrote a book before etc i just started its not much not even a page but does this catch your eye

im sure its filled with spelling errors etc but lmk what you think im looking to see if some lines dont make sense etc i also dont reed to menny books eather


trust me, i can tell.

if you knew there were spelling errors, why didnt you fix them? i only saw one line which didn't contain any spelling/grammatical errors, and that was pure luck on your part.

This post was edited by carteblanche on Apr 22 2014 07:03pm
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Apr 22 2014 11:57pm
You cannot become a writer if you do not read writing.
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Apr 23 2014 03:40am
i see thanks for the advice

i have alote of ideyas in my head but not the skills to put it on paper lol :(
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Apr 23 2014 06:39am
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i see thanks for the advice

i have alote of ideyas in my head but not the skills to put it on paper lol :(


just write it in your native language if you're not comfortable in english.
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May 24 2014 06:25am
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Jun 3 2014 09:28pm
I think it's important for you to first plot out the basics of your story using an outline. It would be quite helpful.
You cant start out by just outlining basic chapter points, then take it a step further and outline specific scenes within each chapter.
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