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Aug 7 2013 02:42pm
Stare at me staring at you, with a blank gaze , leaving you dazed for days. You don't hate me, despise me; you don't even know me. The assumptions made; judging a judge is like walking and talking without movement and words, it hurts! Looking down above the ground so high I see all the people lingering...Die! My eyes have awakened, the eternal light determined an energy that surrounds me, like a fire that crowds me. I am the god who inhabits this land, give me those orders and I will slip around. Beating the system without you knowing; my transcended light is growing, glowing becoming more as I grasp the enlightenment from above, as angelic as a new born dove. I am evolving unlike any other and I am just like everyone else, I was born like you from a mother. Why have I been chosen? Is there a god who can see us all, our downfall? The destruction from creation, as a race we build to destroy; those countless lives buried in a hurry, just take my hand and we will go to the promised land. Destroyed cities, everyday a life without pity. The fighting will never stop with a dictatorship so feared look into my eyes and I will show you fear, now the war has stopped but the world now lives in fear.
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Aug 7 2013 07:04pm
I feel like it is just orderly, pretty words. The fact remains that you put words in there of a light feeling, heavy, morose, and plain contradiction. Especially I am the god who inhabits this land and the following Is there a god who can see us all, our down fall.

I dunno if you are trying to show a person in power who is hated by his nation, or just a dally daydream of some kid who is emo.
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Aug 8 2013 03:55am
Quote (ChrisKz @ Aug 8 2013 01:04am)
I feel like it is just orderly, pretty words. The fact remains that you put words in there of a light feeling, heavy, morose, and plain contradiction. Especially I am the god who inhabits this land and the following Is there a god who can see us all, our down fall.

I dunno if you are trying to show a person in power who is hated by his nation, or just a dally daydream of some kid who is emo.


You could say a daydream which I will explain in a moment, as for the emo part that's not me lol; I am very happy with my life.

I was in Mcdonalds one morning before college, drinking my coffee and I blacked out for a few seconds, I saw what I perceived was the worlds destruction. When I came to I just started writing automatically. I have other things I have written as well; poetry, expressive thought, short stories ect.
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