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May 22 2012 03:08pm
I am very new to poetry, I have not read much, I have not written much. I do not know of any theories, rules or what not. All I want, is actually write something which I aim for to be artistic. I might use it for my music playing too.
I study in the first year of college in Denmark, so I may not be grammatically correct, but please allow yourself to correct any of my mistakes.

Well, here is the first one:

First, the anger
thereafter a veil of sorrow
the voice that creaks
and gets thin
the disappointment
and the hidden
the curse
the revenge
fingers that makes signs
in the air
the day is not yet over.

Another one, for the sake of contrast:

Pearly blue eyes
with a sense of fear
with a look of deprivation
a whispering voice
killing silence
a word unspoken
for those whose lights fade
for those who depart
descending
just to ascend
just to keep fall
falling for beauty
falling because of appeal.

I hope you enjoy.
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May 23 2012 02:40pm
Imagery goes nowhere.
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