The moon and my heart dance together as one
For you give to me what the moon takes from the sun
Purpose and warmth, luminair of the night
Strength from your smile
within your eyes i find light

Your warmth is what reminds me
Of the fire i hold inside
everyday its burning brighter
a flame that cant subside

Your beauty is the embodiement
of all my dreams come true
it appears that all my nights of slumber
have been spent fabricating you

A flower blossums within my heart
that is nourished by your own
And if this flower marks our start
let many more be grown

Not once have i ever doubted
This feeling that burns so true
With everything i have to give
I'm in love with you









lmk what you think

revised version


The moon and my heart sway together as one
For you give to me what the moon takes from the sun
Purpose and warmth, luminair of the night
Strength from your smile
from your eyes i take light

Your beauty is the embodiment
that all my dreams have come true
my past nights of slumber
imagining someone like you

gentle whispers to remind me
of the fire that dwells inside
everyday it's burning brighter
a flame that won't subside

A flower within your heart
thats nourished by my own
if it's blossom marks our start
i hope a meadow will be grown

never have i doubted
this whisper burning through
I now realize more than ever
that I'm in love with you

This post was edited by tedmore on Feb 13 2010 04:57pm

That was pretty damn awesome.

this

Damn good poem though

bad poem. Distortion of syntax doesn't mean you're being poetic. Random distortion only helps the poem not make any sense.
Additionally, the kiss-asses that call it an 'awesome' work are either multis or they have the IQ of Forrest Gump, which, of course, cannot be an insult, because Forrest Gump is an epic movie.

imo too much qq emo nigger shit in the poem

it needs more awesomeness, here ill demonstrate :

The dick and my balls dance together as one
For you give to me what the niggers takes from the chicken
dinner and lunch, rulers of the kitchen
Strength from your rectum
within your ears i find semen

Your pubes are what reminds me
Of the penis i hold inside
everyday its bumping harder
a prick that cant subside

Your nipples are the embodiement
of all my dreams come true
it appears that all my nights of slumber
have been spent raping you

A nazi grows within my heart
that is nourished by your juice
And if this nazi marks our start
let many more be grown

Not once have i ever doubted
This feeling that pricks so deep
With everything i have to give
I just raped your mother

This post was edited by ImtheFirebatyo on Feb 15 2010 02:20pm

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