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Oct 26 2009 09:51pm
I received a letter with this getting published back in 2008.
I while back I received another letter asking for permission to publish it again.

I wrote this when I was in a pretty bad break up, but it was so long ago.
It's nice to see that it is still getting read after almost 2 years. :)
What do you think of it?

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I want so badly to forgive you
For stealing my whole heart
Yet I fear I must abide to thee
For love's a tricky art.

But if I will permit thee
To rob me one more time
I must admit I love to be
The victim of your crime.

I never ever know
When or how or where
A moment you will take from me
Just to show you care.

You are a thief my dear
A clever one at that
For what I thought you took from me
You've seem to given back.

But something is quite different
I really cannot say
For I love the heart you've given me
More and more each day




This post was edited by Pioy on Oct 26 2009 09:53pm
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Oct 26 2009 10:05pm
Wow outstanding.
Good job.
I can't believe there making you purchase it though....
The last verse broke me into tears.

This post was edited by Belldandy on Oct 26 2009 10:07pm
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Oct 26 2009 10:27pm
That's a really nice poem Jere. I feel a very strong emotion when reading it. Well done, congratulations on it getting posted.
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Oct 26 2009 10:45pm
Amazing poem Jere.
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Nov 10 2009 07:51pm
Agree
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Nov 15 2009 05:30pm
Love it
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Nov 15 2009 08:30pm
Bravo.
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Nov 16 2009 08:16pm
It's very good, but one thing that bothered me is you started venacular (I'm using this term correctly right?) and then all of a sudden switched to Shakespearean. (from you to thee)

Very strong emotional pull though.

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Nov 18 2009 02:45pm
amazing :O i love the poem jere :thumbsup:
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Nov 23 2009 12:08pm
Very good poem ;)
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