Hello.
I made up a story it's very short but tell me what you think of it:

There was once a fish who swum across the seas all day and night, happily swimming around and eating food.
Then came the octopus, a big, ferocious creature who threatened to eat the fish.
The fish said "Stop! Don't eat me! I'm too young to die!"
Then the octopus said "I'm not going to eat you... I'm just going to eat your friends. But don't tell them, or I'll have to eat you too!"
The little fish cried and couldn't decide what to do...
Should he tell his friends, or escape with his own life?
He decided to tell his friends and risk getting eaten...
"Watch out! Watch out! An octopus is going to eat you!" yelled the little fish to the rest of the school of fish.
The school of fish panicked and quickly escaped as fast as they could.
"Wait up!" said the little fish, "We can't outrun it! We need a plan!"
"No" said one of the bigger fish, "We already have a plan... we don't need to outrun the octopus, we just need to outrun you!"

And the moral of the story is: Pretend to be nice to your friends, but when you get the chance, abandon them and leave them to die whilst you escape in paradise

Let me know what you think of it

Come on someone rate it out of ten please...

I spent valuable time making this story and no-one even reads it!

I don't know... it just doesn't seem right to me.. I think it's the wrong thing to do..






























I mean if an octopus was going to eat you, and your fishy friends, then you do the right thing and... eat the octopus.. they're delicious.. how can you resist? and then afterwards you can have all the other fish to yourself. What a dumb fish.<_<

















This post was edited by Holland on Sep 4 2009 05:09pm

Thanks for your opinion

quite, 'meh'

Wow, nice.

Thanks

When I started to read it, I'm like "Okay I'm gunna tell this guy how stupid he rights"

but.. I like it Cool story.

The only interesting part was the actual story though. You have to be good with words to keep them entertained through the not so fun parts.

Haha, thats quite funny, it would be realllly bad without the moral

I like it though