New at this but would like some criticism

I come to bed saying to my self dont think just sleep.
I cant,the girl keeps on popping in my head
and one thought and my mind is gone
I'm not annoyed but strangly happy
I toss and turn but it doesnt matter what side I still think of the girl
I put my head under my pillow
but the girl still slips into my head
I start to pull the blanket over my head
but stop, whats the point, she will still slip through
just how she slipped into my heart. The girl
is like a headache, doesnt hurt, but yet reminds
Reminds me of how lucky i am. So dont ever forget,
just smile and give in to the thoughts.
I let my mind wonder into sleep and i dream.
there she is... The girl.

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This is the best poem I've ever read.

Still looking for some feed back! Much appreciated.

please don't think I'm any good at poetry but this poem doesn't seem to have any meter. It seems to be just thoughts written down. Don't take offense because I personally like the idea itself(it's pretty romantic) but the poem is lacking

No not at all! I agree fully actually, I'm still trying to kind of take my thoughts and kind of create more of a deep, meaning poem? So far I can just
express with some words, but your right its definitely lacking the poem vibe. Thank you

hey, not bad at all bit repetitive at times, but i really got your feeling. poems don't nessecarily have to rhyme.

yes I agree that poems don't have to rhyme but I was referring to the meter not the rhyme scheme no problem. try a little more word play perhaps. make every word you write count. like I said, I'm no poet but I enjoy poetry just the same

i like the last two lines the only thing is I think the word you wanted to use was wander not wonder