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May 13 2009 04:38am
watcha think?

For all those moments you can't put into words


I've waited 18 years for this,
For the taste of your kiss.
I can't resist
The feeling of bliss.

When you hold my hand,
I begin to understand.
As I stare into your eyes,
I realize, indescribable moments, aren't lies.

And when you began to squeeze,
As the radio played that song,
I wanted to beg you, please,
Tell me I'm not wrong.

Tell me you love me too,
Baby, can't you see,
All I want is you
To be with me.


The point of no return

Believe that you are amazing,
Inside and out,
Your beauty is blazing,
I haven’t a doubt.

Because “Nothing can compare in this world to you,”
And because you never let me feel blue,
“I give my heart to you,”
And my love will prove true.

My heart is yours, to love and nurture,
Or stomp and torture.
All through hell I have been,
To finally meet someone worthy, to hold within.

“I’d do anything for a smile,”
Carry you a million miles,
Tell you that you have great style,
Or simply stay with you awhile.

Whatever your decision,
Thank you for the vision
Of what real happiness feels like,
I feel I owe you my life
For what you’ve done for me;
I’ve been set free.

Released from a loveless life,
That was tormented with strife.

All that’s left to say,
Is I love you.



The Best Thing That Will Never Happen To Me

I love staying up 'till 4 talking to you
I still feel blessed you talk to me at all
You let me hold your hand and kiss your lips
Your beautiful lips, I miss your lips, I miss you

I'm so alone,
Here, on my own
I'm missing you and
Thinking about how you're
Not thinking of me

You told me you loved me,
You said I impacted your life
You gave me the best moments of mine
You make me feel great about myself
God I wish it were real

I'm so alone,
Here, on my own
I'm missing you and
Thinking about how you're
Not thinking of me

I always hope you'll leave your misery behind
And be happy with me
But then I realize
I'm just being naive
And you're the best thing
That will Never happen to me.


I was feeling like shit one day...but I think it's so clever.

A loss for words

When I don't know what to say
Or what to do
I only wish
I could be there with you

To hold you close
And tell you it'll be okay
You are strong
You'll live another day

Sometimes it's okay to cry
And let loose your tears
Let it out
For those you love dear

And when you're ready
I'll still be here waiting
To hold you close
And tell you it'll be okay



eh...she was really upset about her grandma's death, and I didn't know what to say...wrote this on the spot in like a minute.

Precious

What is a scare?
Is it something you can bear?
Question, if you dare:
Do they really care?

Well I do,
So what scares you?
I will help you through,
And make you smile, too.

So smile, and have no fear,
For the end is near,
And I am here,
To hold you dear.

One in a million,
Indescribable,
You are you,
Simply: Precious.


Dreaming

Please, no more tears
Simply smile
And forget your fears
Stay awhile

Let me take you out
We'll roam about
With nothing to do
But I'll be with you
And you'll be with me
Happy as can be

This is but a dream
That I wish to become reality
Your beauty makes me want to scream
And you have a lovely personality

I've nothing to lose
The choice is yours to choose
I'd rather be rejected than regret
Or acceptance, better yet
I like you and hope you agree
*, Will you go out with me?

*[I edited out her name]

Saviour (for lack of creativity)

Who am I?
Not even I truly know
I am me
And I'll surely grow
Into someone greater
So don't be a hater
All I want is to make you feel unreal
Like all your surroundings are ordeal
Please, have no fear
For I am here
To help you in anyway I can
I want to be that man
I want to be a part of your life
And turn the darkness to light.
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May 13 2009 08:35am
im gonna assume ur pretty young, which is a euphemistic criticism
u dont have one original line there, but they will come with age (hopefullY), u need to realize ur being banal/maudlin.
one way for you to defend urself is to call these lyrics, which i highly suggest you do.
u obviously put a lot of work into this and thats wat really matters for young ppl, so keep plugging lil brother.
im interested to see wat u write when ur puppy love stage is finished
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Aug 8 2009 04:47pm
Quote (eriot @ Wed, 13 May 2009, 08:35)
im gonna assume ur pretty young, which is a euphemistic criticism
u dont have one original line there, but they will come with age (hopefullY), u need to realize ur being banal/maudlin.
one way for you to defend urself is to call these lyrics, which i highly suggest you do.
u obviously put a lot of work into this and thats wat really matters for young ppl, so keep plugging lil brother.
im interested to see wat u write when ur puppy love stage is finished


Maybe a little harsh, but not entirely false. Most of this is unoriginal, but it's very difficult (if not impossible) to create anything original anymore. I would almost go as far to say as no invention or production since the stone age has been original.
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Aug 10 2009 12:30am
Quote (The_Disputatious_Linguist @ Sat, Aug 8 2009, 03:47pm)
Maybe a little harsh, but not entirely false.  Most of this is unoriginal, but it's very difficult (if not impossible) to create anything original anymore.  I would almost go as far to say as no invention or production since the stone age has been original.


holy shit. thread necromancer of the decade
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Aug 10 2009 04:28pm
Quote (Kamikizzle @ Mon, 10 Aug 2009, 00:30)
holy shit. thread necromancer of the decade


lol
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Aug 19 2009 02:31pm
Quote (The_Disputatious_Linguist @ Tue, Aug 11 2009, 12:28am)
lol


hehe
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