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Mar 3 2009 01:48am
im glad to see this recent surge in ppl posting poetry here.
to promote and give incentive, i will offer fgs for original works. post here or link if u want ur own topic.
post past work if u want; if its worth sharing.
since bls has very little traffic, im not sure when ill close, lets see wat happens.

ill award first place 500 and two runner ups 250
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Mar 3 2009 02:43am
This is something I wrote after a really difficult break up, and I needed to release. I can almost still feel the warm summer breeze from time to time...

When we met we shared our views
The sky was a mix of purple and blues
We talked underneath the stars,
And our thoughts flowed free from our mouths
Straight into our hearts.

You were the one in my dreams
And you changed my life so it seems...
We danced in the sweet warm breeze that summer.
Our feet were pulled from underneath us,
And to you I sang.

I can feel the bitter cold this night
Nothing like you next to that candlelight
A brilliant fire sparked in your eyes
Here I am blaming myself,
Because I put out the flame...

Another night with sleep escaping me
Wondering when we'll see
The sun slowly sneaks through the window
And i withdraw inside myself
Waiting for the stars once more.
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Mar 3 2009 01:10pm
who is judging this and how? what type of poetry is the judge looking for etc
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Mar 3 2009 06:43pm
Quote (Kamikizzle @ Tue, 3 Mar 2009, 14:10)
who is judging this and how? what type of poetry is the judge looking for etc


i dono rly, i was thinking just me, but now u mention it i wonder if i should ask a couple ppl to help judge.
as long as the poet thinks its worth sharing, it should be posted, no extra requirements.
u have a few works already posted. post one if u want, or wait til ur next one is finished and debut it here.
ur skilled enough not to worry about it much. this contest is all in good faith.
i wont be making any criticisms in here, ie i dont wana dissuade anyone from posting.

ppl post ur work!
its hard enough to recognize poetry here among all the topics about books that abound
lets centralize, unite, coalesce as a force
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Mar 3 2009 09:24pm
My free flow expression of the moment : http://forums.d2jsp.org/index.php?showtopic=28915949&f=266

Feel free to discuss it with me, preffered pm so I see it in a timely matter smile.gif

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Mar 4 2009 02:49am
This is fucking perfect. I needed a place to post.
Check this out, wrote it earlier smile.gif

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Yesterday
By: Keith MacKay

Two nights ago- I dreamed of love,
And here's what it beguiled,
A heavenly vision looked my way,
Gazed at me, and smiled.

Yesterday, I met the Lovely,
While shopping at the mall,
And earlier this morning,
I gave her a call.

Yesterday, She looked radiant,
Lavishly lit like fire.
So serene at seventeen,
My one true desire.

Yesterday, I let her know,
I think she understood.
I looked into her eyes and said,
"Forever, and For Good."

Today, I made a vow,
Never to depart.
To love her forevermore...
To be the keeper of her heart...

Today, I want to tell her,
That no matter where we are,
When in need of good luck,
I will be her shooting star...

Today, She needs to know,
That if her ambitions fray,
Squeeze and hold onto my hand,
And I will lead the way.

Today, Is like the ocean,
To big to comprehend,
Although with everlasting love,
We will foresee the end.





I wrote this today:
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Untitled
By: Keith MacKay


She packed her bags, She left again.
She drove off to St. Paul
Left me in Arkansas
Hoping someday she might call

I've made my share of choices,
And there's few that I regret.
But the day I watched her walk away,
Is a day I won't forget.

'Cause whenever I think about,
The fool I used to be,
I remember all the reasons why,
She stopped loving me.

If I could go back in time,
I'd erase the things I've said.
I would appologize to everyone,
To the girl that I've mislead.

I'd make her fall in love with me,
And I'd swing for that home run,
I'd love her every night and day,
For, she was the one.

Solemn and self-reproached,
Are the only things I feel,
Loneliness cuts so fine,
The pain is so surreal.

I was looking forward to the day,
That I couldn't feel the pain,
While slowly counting seconds down,
Standing in the rain...

I wrote her a letter,
And I'll tell you what it said.
She received it at the funeral,
She wept as she read.

"Your love for me was a memory,
That chose not to be found,
You took your time and took to long,
Now I'm six feet in the ground."


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Mar 4 2009 04:42pm
Quote (eriot @ Tue, Mar 3 2009, 04:43pm)
i dono rly, i was thinking just me, but now u mention it i wonder if i should ask a couple ppl to help judge.
as long as the poet thinks its worth sharing, it should be posted, no extra requirements.
u have a few works already posted. post one if u want, or wait til ur next one is finished and debut it here.
ur skilled enough not to worry about it much. this contest is all in good faith.
i wont be making any criticisms in here, ie i dont wana dissuade anyone from posting.

ppl post ur work!
its hard enough to recognize poetry here among all the topics about books that abound
lets centralize, unite, coalesce as a force


i ask because i know my type of dr seuss style poetry isnt very big with you. so if i were to enter a piece it wouldnt stand very well against others who write in a style more geared to yours.
im pretty sure ive posted most of my poems that i like, though i never got your feedback on my latest one nor have i posted my first one.

i suppose ill submit my newest one since its not my typical writing style :/

February 14th

I woke up the fourteenth by your side
and i thought this cant be real
To have a woman like you defied
anything that i could feel

But as i awoke and rubbed my eyes,
I saw you get in the tub,
grabbed my keys with intent to suprise
--off to the cannibis club!

babe i packed this bowl for me and you
let us have a little smoke
So we can do what those bad kids do
oh, the feelings you invoke.

i bought roses this valentines day
And theyre meant for only you
Come with me to dance to the DJ
Well stay out tonight till two

but if we dont make it out the door
i promise i wont say no
for tonight, it's our love we'll restore
while watching the melting snow.

Say "i love you" on this holiday
as i see that gorgeous face.
now in bed doing a love ballet
and once more by the fireplace

the fifthteenth is here but ill still say
"I will love you till the end"
And the smile on your face will portray
The time with which we spend.


This post was edited by Kamikizzle on Mar 4 2009 04:43pm
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Mar 4 2009 08:30pm
Poem
I've lost a love so pure and deep
It'd make the strongest of us weep
And cry out in the chilly air
That mournful sound of dark despair
For no one could have seen that fate
No one could see or speculate
Her eyes, the brown, the dark lost soul
That took away mine and left a hole
An emptiness I call my own
With every passing second grows
I saw her hand as it waved goodbye
I felt the words as I started to cry
No longer was I needed there
Problems she alone could bear
A woman grown, one outgrown me
No more here do I need be
A candle, I had shone the way
She made a torch the other day
Which she now makes brighter by herself
So here I am, on a shelf
Watching with each day gone past
For now I know that she will last
I've lost a love so pure and deep
It'd make the strongest of us weep

That's my contribution. Whether I win or not, I hope you all enjoy.
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Mar 4 2009 09:29pm
I submitted my poem to www.poems-and-quotes.com a few days ago, here is one of my reviews:

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Thepainwithinme ( P ) at 2009-03-04

Oh my god.
I loved this. It was written so beautifully. It flows so well. I can't get over this .
It's heaven on paper. even though it's not on paper. tongue.gif

amazing ! 5/5.


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Mar 4 2009 11:14pm

Im here writing down the things on my mind, trying to flee the negative thoughts to kill time
They wont disapear as i write, so should I stop? No I stand my ground and fight
Fight to the end they all say, but whens the end? is it today?
So im here and confused no imagination can tell you, and your emused at the actions i sell you
Maybe this is all im worth? so many questions they started from birth
They end when your dead and in the earth, then your a ghost no good but to lurk
So we live for what reason, or breathe for what season?
Sometimes I sit here thinking should i leave em? Should I leave em..


heh got bored
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