This is a poem I just made tonight.
Its called: The Dream

I wanna write a story about my life, i just dont know how cause im never right
no matter what i write down its always wrong, so hows this gonna turn into a song
my lifes crazy goes in different angles, up down side to side gets all tangled
Im thinking where do I start, and whats comming from heart but shits diffrent so it falls apart
Lifes crazy so many ways its wavy, some ripples in a lake smoother then some ladies
Other times its hurricane waves, could swallow long island just in a couple of days
So I go with the flow almost as a river, so beautiful but cold so i shiver
I make it but its so close, as long as i keep trying ima take lifes dose
Hits after hits up to the rose, the thorns got me as if im the host
Cant wait untill I succeed, to the top with out all money and the greed
Like a seed youll see what I mean, Just keep pushing man its not all a dream....


Can use fixing up but I dont write poetry but decided to write alitttle tonight
Just looking for opinions!

Its not half bad at all. I like it. :]

Yea its good, I liked it

the thorns got me as if I'm the host

good line, rest is replacable, to be harsh
sounds kinda juggalo fodder
but mebe u got potential

haha yeh it need better flow to