n2b mase, I mean considering your age. It's not detailed very much, it's basically a less than descriptive story that doesn't have names, a place, a time, or any events, so in that respect you should try to include some detail to enrich the poem itself. You don't really need to go off personal experience. When I write stuff, like for example a poem, I shut off everything around me. No computers, TV, cell phones, no pets, no people, not even any light. Anything that can help me to clear my mind for maximum focus. Then start drifting into the boundaries of my imagination and attempt to surpass them.
After awhile if you can lose full consciousness, and go to semi-conscious states, your body can remain plenty active, and you won't fall asleep, and remember whatever your imagining. Then imagine two people, then imagine a place, and think up something to happen.
Love stories are dead. They are deader than dead. There haven't been many great love stories in even the past several hundred years. So, try and depict something involving that, and go into detail of what your mind comes up with. That's the reason people watch movies at all, or listen to music... It's because the writer or composer went somewhere in his mind, and came up with something spectacular. Ideally you have the path set out before you by earlier artists... Just try and write what you see, and try not to base it around what you feel... cause when you overrun your words with emotion, you lose your focus on the detail of the story, being as more actions are taken by a person daily by emotion than even instinct. So yeah, that's why love shit is hard to write.
Quote (CamelBlue @ Mon, Feb 23 2009, 03:04pm)
Yeah, your gonna be a 40 yr old virgin.