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Dec 20 2008 09:56pm
sustaining the self
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a man is haunted by computer virus. not ai/supernatural, just annoying kind of haunted.
a man is a computer virus. a man is the computer screen where a virus is taking place.
the screen sometimes he is making the decisions. the virus is a game. and sometimes makes the decisions.
there is a game on the screen. the man is trying to get rid of the virus. he is trying to cancel the program to get out of the game. he must figure it out.

the program offers you a game. you say no. you hit cancel and hurry up to delete it while it understands you are saying no.
you must time it perfectly. it is hard. the games keep coming without stop. they are on a conveyer belt. they have different pause times.
you must learn. sometimes you want to play the game tho. but you don't know, maybe it will be very bad.

there are three same games in a row now. same times. you learn the cadence. you click delete program. you made it.
now you are in the game. there are three men sitting on a table in a classroom. they make diarrhea very hard. suddenly they are standing and vomitting very hard.
suddenly one man is standing alone and two of them are on the ground, but theyr censored with mosaic.
now they are diarrhea very hard. now vomit. it is funny. it is game. it is good. laughing very hard.
now they are not censored. they are fucking. now diarrhea. now vomit. now fucking very hard.
you dont like this game anymore. diarrhea. vomit. fucking. this is not game! its just they do same thing all again.
you dont want to watch. but you are screen. you have hurt his feelings. you cant find delete. you are virus. diarrhea. vomit. fucking. delete.

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i'd love to hear what you think this story is about
help me out, thx
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Dec 27 2008 07:26am
hmmmm different
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Jan 14 2009 11:10pm
i swear i must have the lowest views to comment ratio ever..
why does no one comment?
u must have some thoughts after reading this..
if ur reaction is confusion, thats a useful criticism
if u think its boring and bad, i can handle it.
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Jan 15 2009 12:37am
I found it to be a bit incoherent at times... just seemed really random and disjointed.
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Jan 15 2009 02:29am
i dont get it ...
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Jan 19 2009 01:53am
conri, u are correct, it is a bit incoherent and disjointed. the narrative style is inspired by beckett's malone dies. i'd be interested to kno wat u reckon the piece is about.

there is nothing to "get", really. just feelings to have. well its slightly academic but i dont expect anyone to kno freud and lacan.
i just wana kno wat u thought it was about or how it made u feel.

ppl continue to read the topic and not comment.
wud it be easier to say why u do that? my goodness
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Jan 19 2009 04:23pm
at first i didnt get it
then halfway through i thought "is this supposed to be funny?" so i laughed
then it ended badly so i felt bad for laughing
way to stir up my emotions eriot tongue.gif
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Jan 19 2009 04:41pm
Ender's Game meets two girls one cup.

Entirely original and revolting. :]
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