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Sep 10 2008 11:47am
Spoken Word is a genre of poetry that is to be performed and not merely read. I have over 150 of your conventional poems that everyone thinks of when they have poetry but my spoken word collection is much smaller but growing very quickly. Whenever I have a new one I will share it here for you guys to critisize or congratulate. I'll also give a little recap of how the slam went.




I guess I should say a bit about myself...I've been writing poetry since 2003 but my first slam was in April of 2007. Anyone that has been to a Poetry Slam knows that there is a huge difference between Spoken Word and "closet poetry" for lack of better words. This is espescially the case in San Antonio, one of the rumored most rowdy slams in the nation where you expect to get heckled and people laugh at the idea of snapping fingers in satisfaction. Over the past year and a half I've continually gotten better and now am one of the top contenders to go to nationals next year. It's crazy really...In a town of 1.2 million people if I go out I will nearly always have atleast one person recognize me and stop me to talk. It's a great release from my general world too. At work I'm dressed suit and tie and everyone thinks of me as Mr. Professional but at slam I get to act just as crazy as I want. I'm always the loudest person in the crowd when I'm not on stage and I'm generally the hardest heckler. Anyways here are my works...


Occaisionally I upload a video, not me at slam though just at my house: http://vids.myspace.com/index.cfm?fuseaction=vids.myvideos&MyToken=ba62094c-0bd2-4bab-acc4-38fc3b068285





This first poem took me about 45 minutes to scribble on the back of some random poster only an hour before slam started...I had gone the whole week without writing anything new.

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I got a head job from a head job that hoped she would get a cunning linguist to perform cunalingus on her but she soon learned not all poets give mustache rides or even have mustaches.  I assured her I surely would if I wasn't in a commited relationship with my hand and all we had previously done was a terrible mistake.  For I only involve myself with the aestheticly pleasing and mentally stimulating and unfortunately this fine bitch made a 50 on that two question test.

Despite what you assume there are some assumptions I don't make.
I don't assume you're a slut if we fuck our first date.  I don't assume your a slut if you've slept with X amount of guys.  I don't assume all pretty faces are empty and I don't assume you want to fuck if you wear a skirt and no panties...I just do it.

On a serious note to me you are a slut if we fuck the first night and you don't say a single word for breakfast the next morning.
I think you are a slut if you don't have anything besides your vagina to offer me or the next guy you take home.
And though a pretty face is great to look at I have four other senses that need pleasing.

So please make this committed relationship with my hand stronger.  Give me something for this hand to write about!  Tie my tongue and make me hungry then feed me thoughts that take days to digest.  Ridicule my riddled regurgitation and challenge my contemplation.  Infidelity brings forth the finest non fiction so speak lies just please offer me more than what lie between the thighs, be the reason time flies, be the reason the world decides silence is not golden and if they won't go for that make me convince them your voice and words you speak are platinum then use them to paint a picture that leaves me speachless.





This poem is probably my most favorite piece to date

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Want to be a poet?

You give me your heart and I'll give you a pen
You give me your trust and I'll give you a desk
You give me your mind and I'll give you paper
You give me your body and I'll give you my ink

I don't promise plots and odds are I won't give you forever
but I can give you inspiration and heart ache enough to write masterpieces
that speak volumes louder than any mic could ever magnify your voice
I sale you lines in the forms of the finest cut white lies you've ever heard
Whispered through a slightly miss-alligned jaw that refuses symnetry
And I advise you
Remember the ones whispered most lightly and least frequently
For they shall make a splendid chorus
Or if you so desire-then a most marvelous conclusion
and
The only reason you're not a poet is because you haven't loved enough,
You haven't hurt enough, Haven't fallen down on your face enough...
And please don't give me a fucking list of what you've been thru because a list is not a fucking poem
It's a list
so though it's not my intention I'll make you a poet

Generally things that come to pass are never my intention...

Like it's not my intention to break hearts as I've had mine broken in the past
Like it's not my intention to get you in bed...
Like that last line was a complete and utter lie
But it is never in any way my intention to cause pain to another person...

I want love because in a life like mine it's not something I've ever gotten to feel because everyone I've ever had has left me
Mommy's cocaine, heroine and never ending line of shit men
Daddy's heroine, liquor and never ending line of ugly sluts
My sister's and brother with their other families I hardly know
Then move after move which took me away from friends
So yes, though I'll never say I love you I will treat you with a love you never experienced
A love that I wish I could go back and give to the people that society generally thinks are most deserving
A love like this for all of them and it will all be given unto you in essence
but when I've realized that I'm not meaning a word I'm saying I will find some way to cut ties and move on.

And you will break down, you will have your share of tears, you will feel betrayed broken and let down
And though I will no longer have use for your heart, trust, mind or body
I will never request back from you my pen, paper, desk or ink
So write...Dip your pen into your heart, grab the deepest thoughts of your mind, call trust the liar that it is, write with all the ink in your body and share with the world what a vile piece of shit I am.


This post was edited by 99white99 on Sep 10 2008 11:50am
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Sep 10 2008 07:08pm
I don't know why he thinks himself a poet
But I'll try to tell him so he'll know it--
If words were water his syllables would sting
Whatever tongue would try to drink that thing

In yester years they wrote to beauty praise
I'm puzzled as to why these hither days
Produce such eminently bitter verse
And to the mind be such a vile curse

I hope you know of whom I speak by now
He hasn't much beneath his bony brow
A master butcher of "poetic" lines
A famous white betwixt two ninety-nines.

sup

This post was edited by Kamikizzle on Sep 10 2008 07:12pm
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Sep 10 2008 09:11pm
Didn't much understand that but what I did get didn't sound too kind.
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Sep 10 2008 09:29pm
Quote (99white99 @ Wed, Sep 10 2008, 08:11pm)
Didn't much understand that but what I did get didn't sound too kind.


i guess you dont remember the old days?
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Sep 10 2008 09:51pm
Quote (Kamikizzle @ Wed, Sep 10 2008, 10:29pm)


Ahh but before being attacked I do always prefer I know the context of the attack. It was a long time ago when you had a different name too tongue.gif

almost 2 years ago, wow ohmy.gif

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Sep 11 2008 11:46am
Quote (99white99 @ Wed, Sep 10 2008, 08:51pm)
Ahh but before being attacked I do always prefer I know the context of the attack.  It was a long time ago when you had a different name too tongue.gif

almost 2 years ago, wow ohmy.gif


no, inviction wrote it. ive never had a name change
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Sep 11 2008 11:55am
Quote (Kamikizzle @ Thu, Sep 11 2008, 12:46pm)
no, inviction wrote it. ive never had a name change


Oh, since you copy and pasted it, I for some reason assumed you wrote it.

I did upload 2 more videos today.
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Sep 11 2008 02:34pm
Quote (99white99 @ Thu, Sep 11 2008, 10:55am)
Oh, since you copy and pasted it, I for some reason assumed you wrote it.

I did upload 2 more videos today.


lol nope biggrin.gif i just deliver
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Sep 12 2008 11:43am
Here's a nice bit I enjoy. Never figured out who came up with it though.

Accidents in the back seat create kids.
Kids in the back seat cause accidents.
If knowledge is power, and power corrupts.
Stay smart, be dumb.
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Sep 13 2008 01:54am
i read the first piece u posted,

i think as a performance piece, i would enjoy the unequivocal adherance to subjectivity, fresh povs for our ultra pc culture
gender critic wise, i like the subversion of slut, its becoming a very contemporary theme, ie, bright eyes, hell ride,
but a feminist critc wud tear ur shit apart for wat they would aruge as 21st century patriarchy
i only say that in case ur not aware, ie not to judge ur piece as needing correction,
i personally would find it unnerving to take on such an easily attacked writer-voice
i have interests in gender criticism and secretly wish to head the charge in the backlash against feminism, but much diff from u

and btw, u describe urself as separate from "closet" poets, and i'd disagree with the connotation of closet.
performance and textual are mutually exclusive, no value judgement needed
lyrics are often the dumbest things u'll ever read, from the closet perspective, me
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