Wrote all of these myself. Thought I'd share a few of them.

C/c is welcomed and encouraged.

Title:Developed explosive deception



You all are the same to me; I have only just begun…
Conformed, compressed, deformed into the same thing.
I've had enough, you'll never see me through the cruciatus* chamber.
I am something you'll never be; you're unable to grasp me, you're unable to achieve what it takes to breach me.


I'll never forget the way you screeched and screamed, the way you looked in disbelief.
Strung up against the wall, hooks clinging in your skin, skewed down to your knees, don't even beg me.
Mercy is not given to your filthy type. You're atrociously disgusting, a revolting gruesome mess.
Worthless swine, where is your silver tongue now? You chose the reason, not me.


Reproduction is your only usefulness, emotion fuels your reason.
Nothing to offer, worth keeping, fucking think on your own.
Gluttonous harlot, force your infectious blinding lies deep into your larynx.
Conjure your pathetic reason, you can't move, no where to go.


There is no desire, no incentive, for you to stay.
Developing inside my mind...you will not be able to devise
Don't compromise your life, try to justify your lies.
At least the final peace is prepared, the masterpiece is accomplished.

This post was edited by 7_Deadly_Sins on May 26 2008 12:29am

this is insanely good im jelous of ur skillz

This post was edited by pkxd on May 26 2008 08:36am

Not to conjure my pathetic reasoning {}, but at the begginging of the poem, 'you' refers to a general group, but later on, it seems to refer to a single person. Without aksing who you may have had in mind toward the end, can you say something about what moved you from you to you? I like your style and it provokes some imagery--it seems a little vicious with a view to looking down at others and then down upon someone in particular. A bit like how I'd post in General Help on a bad day

Nice work

Ohhhh wait now, is each "stanza" its own poem? That would certainly clear up my question

This post was edited by RewtheBrave on May 26 2008 01:40pm

Nah it's a full poem.


Hm, you as a group refers to a general set of people I guess, I dont want to say what because it'd give it away.
The later refers to a single person I guess.
I did the switch because to begin with I wanted to make a generalzation, and then target a single individual in the later.

Answer?

This was wrote a while back, I'll proabley try to revise it at a later date when I get better.

My poems are random, something I need to work on, only been doing it for uh 6ish months, and really just started getting good at it 2ish months ago.

i liked it, nice job

n1

Title: The repetitive force will not submerge me.




Infectious, controlling, manipulative.
You’ll never get me. I will not conform.
My pride will not let you triumph over me.
I will discard your soul into an ill forgotten inferno.


I’ll annihilate your equilibrium, your spectrum. I am in full control.
Don’t you ever...miss judge me, under estimate me.
Revenge is mine, I’ll throw my life like a grenade.
Vengeance will follow shortly, the pain of life.


You’ll be on your hands and knees.
Begging for forgiveness, redemption, salvation.
Mercy will not be bestowed upon you.
You’ve tried, to betray me for the last time.


I will rise above, I will overcome.
Why do you seek to destroy me?
I’ll take your last bit of hope, and smash it into your torso.
I am stronger than you could possible comprehend.


I’ll never forget this, no matter what you try.
You can’t brainwash me. You will not succeed.
I feel myself, evolving into something else..
What is this, the unemotional beast trampling inside me.


You’re damned for life, you will never know me.
This is the last moment you’ll challenge me.
I’ll make a mockery of you, and your life, just give me time.
The infinite circle of purification, you better show remorse, your life is mine.

Your poems are great. Seemed to have the underlying current of repressed rage.

Thanks!
Most of them are dark/aggressive.
I've got a few not so much that I'll be posting soon.