I felt alone until last night
when finally someone had showed me the light
you opened my world then closed it down
without you ill be lonely, a hopeless clown
when things go wrong you will always know
your love for me will finally show
i wont be there but ill tell you this
it will only take a while to achieve my personal bliss
im going to move on so i want you to know
my feelings for you will still always grow
your going to be happy and thats fine with me
but when he hurts you dont plead to me.
your only a friend now in my eyes
a troublesome friendship now with ties
we had our fun and laughed alot
the chance was there.. or so i thought
well im gonna miss you but i still will be there
your in my heart, please know that i still care
i know there are others that i could love
i just wish your the one that would be my white dove
moving on wont be so bad
ill just remember the fun times we had
well this is the end of my sad poem
dont forget about me when you go home

do you want my honesy criticism?

terrible

thats what i was going to say

you manipulate the lines just so it rhymes, you pay no attention to syllable structure and your sentences don't make sense because you reword them just so you can make it rhyme. the subject is kinda stupid to, i'm sorry but its just aweful. i'd prefer a freeverse poem to this and thats saying something