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Nov 2 2007 02:20pm

I think it's great man. =] good work. Very creative.

And I bet some of u assholes who said it sucks couldn't write a 2 liner.

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Nov 2 2007 02:27pm

great.

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Nov 6 2007 05:16pm

Awful poem, fucking emo and who the fuck wants to read a poem that's all about suicide? This poem is total trash, 0/10.

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#44

Nov 6 2007 06:23pm

seriously crap, my 8 year old cousin could do better.

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Nov 6 2007 08:18pm

Quote (Mentalsmackheads @ Fri, Nov 2 2007, 04:20pm)

I think it's great man. =] good work. Very creative.

And I bet some of u assholes who said it sucks couldn't write a 2 liner.

Rofl@ "good poems can't be 2 lines long"

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#46

Nov 7 2007 09:14am

Its nice.

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Nov 7 2007 04:28pm

i vote we change the begining and end to something a little more catchy and switch out some of the words in the middle it seems like it should have big words lol like words no 1 knows like edkar allan poe's works

but also keep the little repeat thing at the end

but thats just me

so i voted other

This post was edited by Ferguson on Nov 7 2007 04:29pm

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#48

Nov 13 2007 05:03pm

i wish it wasnt about killing/suicide

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#49

Nov 13 2007 09:04pm

Quote (drewtx84 @ Sat, Apr 28 2007, 11:29pm)

meh i made this poem when i was bored...quite emo lol. tell me wat u think about it. i haven't put much thought on it.

I used to be a was.
Now I am an is.
Screeching for safety as I decide to fly away from suicide.
Flickering my eyes as I put the knife out of my mind from suicide.
Desert winds grunt silently by my side preventing me from suicide.
Battered and bruise as I struggle out of my burden from suicide.
I used to be a was.
Now I am suicide.

rate my poem thanks xD

ummm, are you like emo/ gothic?

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Nov 13 2007 09:12pm

Quote (CoolCat @ Wed, Nov 14 2007, 03:04am)

ummm, are you like emo/ gothic?

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