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#31

Jun 11 2007 10:31am

greatssss!

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#32

Jun 13 2007 01:24pm

Quote (KLuJe @ Sun, Apr 29 2007, 05:11pm)

Quote (drewtx84 @ Sun, Apr 29 2007, 05:08pm)

Lawl wow, so people think this poem just sucks. Just to let people know, A POEM DOESN'T NESSESARILY HAVE TO RHYME. RHYMING = More Restriction of words to put in. Thanks

this sucks mate,srry

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Jun 20 2007 12:30pm

Quote (drewtx84 @ Sun, Apr 29 2007, 09:08am)

Lawl wow, so people think this poem just sucks. Just to let people know, A POEM DOESN'T NESSESARILY HAVE TO RHYME. RHYMING = More Restriction of words to put in. Thanks

U shouldn't be so defensive. After all, u did ask for ppl to rate it. I rated 2nd from the top, because I don't think any poem, when written in earnest, "sucks". The good thing about ur poem (in testament to the ratings u've gotten), is that it doesn't conform to the popular standard of "what a poem should be." U have originality (which oftentimes is translated by people as "sucky"). Keep writing, and good things will happen

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Oct 25 2007 03:35pm

Quote (darcanegel @ Sat, Jun 9 2007, 09:39am)

alright, just FYI i'm an english major so i hope i have a better idea of what I'm talking about than all the 11 year olds here to discuss their harry potter lunchbox. Not that i'm trying to insult anyone in particular, but there definitely ARE those people around and their opinions are...i hate to say it...less important

anyway, lets see...well main problems are that the metaphors don't make a lot of sense...I have no idea what the sands and whatnot have to do with suicide. Also desert winds don't grunt. The whole poem seems to move away from suicide, but at the end he "is" a suicide, which goes against the direction the rest of your poem was. Also, while i understand freeverse fine, it doesn't have much of a rhythm to it at all.

Yup, sorry to rag on you but I figure people can use help more than compliments in the long run.

yeap.....RANDOMNESS just comes to my head and then boom, i wrote the poem like that.

and u might be wondering wtf. why am i bumping my thread 6 months later...got that link on the create shortcut thingy, didn't erase this. so yep. keep the comments coming

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#35

Oct 27 2007 04:01am

Just sucks

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#36

Oct 27 2007 02:36pm

i've heard much worse attempts

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#37

Oct 29 2007 09:10pm

to emo for my liking

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#38

Oct 30 2007 05:35pm

I dont like it :/

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#39

Oct 30 2007 07:04pm

Quote (drewtx84 @ Sun, Apr 29 2007, 01:08pm)

Lawl wow, so people think this poem just sucks. Just to let people know, A POEM DOESN'T NESSESARILY HAVE TO RHYME. RHYMING = More Restriction of words to put in. Thanks

Lawl@ "YOU PEOPLE DON'T KNOW ANYTHING ABOUT POETRY, THAT'S WHY YOU THINK IT SUCKS

POEMS DONT HAVE TO RHYME YOU KNOW"

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#40

Oct 31 2007 12:40pm

Quote (usmeng @ Mon, 30 Apr 2007, 12:49)

hmm..not bad...but its kinda funny..

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