Thanks.
No it's not about my dad, I have the best dad possible.

good~

Thanks!

John i really liked your last one, nice picture in my head, i like the mood and the way it flows

thanks alot m8!

The first line of the poem was great, but the following lines of the first stanza contrasted differently with the rest of the poem.

I noted that you do a good job telling of events/stories in your poem, and I think you ended the piece extremely well.

IMO, I wasn't very fond of the beginning, but everything after is really good.

This post was edited by Hanmin on Sep 6 2008 11:28pm

Thanks alot! I'll try to use it to grow with my next peice.

come on john hurry up and post us some more poetry
ive been waiting for like a week you slacker