Poem For My Girlfriend - Topic

thanks to everyones nice comments. we've been dating for 8 months and she liked it after i gave it to her. it wasnt just a random idea, she likes poetry. she has written some and so have i and shes mentioned likining some of mine that shes seen but i dont write all that much.

but yeah w/e she liked it and thanks for the nice comments

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#24

Feb 20 2010 03:27am

Quote (onepagememory @ Feb 15 2010 03:51pm)

bad poem. Distortion of syntax doesn't mean you're being poetic. Random distortion only helps the poem not make any sense.
Additionally, the kiss-asses that call it an 'awesome' work are either multis or they have the IQ of Forrest Gump, which, of course, cannot be an insult, because Forrest Gump is an epic movie.

care to explain more in depth instead of acting like an arrogant douche bag with nothing to back it? i would love to see your poetry, please do share with us.

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Feb 25 2010 07:17pm

I think its safe to say this is an epic thread.

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Mar 2 2010 12:52pm

+1 in epicness

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Mar 2 2010 03:47pm

I like it a lot, actually. It does seem very intimate, so I'll agree you shouldn't give this to someone unless your feelings match the poem's sentiment.

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Mar 3 2010 08:52pm

Quote (tedmore @ Feb 20 2010 02:27am)

care to explain more in depth instead of acting like an arrogant douche bag with nothing to back it? i would love to see your poetry, please do share with us.

I'm sorry I hurt your feelings. PM me if you still want what you requested.

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#29

Mar 3 2010 11:25pm

Quote (ImtheFirebatyo @ 15 Feb 2010 16:17)

imo too much qq emo nigger shit in the poem

it needs more awesomeness, here ill demonstrate :

The dick and my balls dance together as one
For you give to me what the niggers takes from the chicken
dinner and lunch, rulers of the kitchen
Strength from your rectum
within your ears i find semen

Your pubes are what reminds me
Of the penis i hold inside
everyday its bumping harder
a prick that cant subside

Your nipples are the embodiement
of all my dreams come true
it appears that all my nights of slumber
have been spent raping you

A nazi grows within my heart
that is nourished by your juice
And if this nazi marks our start
let many more be grown

Not once have i ever doubted
This feeling that pricks so deep
With everything i have to give
I just raped your mother

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#30

May 19 2010 06:46am

Loved it, great job! How long did you work on this? Was it a whim write, or something you've been working on over time?
Was a nice read, cheers!
(Regrettably I have to say I also laughed at the edited version)

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