i think its all a little bit cliche sounding. you seem to be stringing together verbs adjectives and adverbs constantly in every line simply using complex words while having no real focus on meaning. making it sound "deep" isn't necessarily what makes poetry good

but as far as that whole style goes you do it well, im just not a fan

the meaning is there. if you send me one thing that sounds even remotely like this ill support your theory, which is apparently the buzz word.

im not saying that it lacks meaning entirely, im simply saying you throw in way too many adjectives and adverbs that dont serve any purpose besides making it sound incredibly wordy. It distracts from any meaning you might actually be trying to convey because you string together complex words that work together loosely because they are forced.

This post was edited by tedmore on May 22 2009 06:32pm

well this is my 1000th post