Very nice.
It could be a little more..properly written though.


Thanks for the feedback/honesty Kami


I made 2 more the other day which I will be posting shortly.


This post was edited by STds_Ruined_my_life on Feb 10 2008 09:11pm

for the 3 6/10's i'd up them to 8 uf the endings were more connected to the poem itself

i just made that last poem up in like 10 minutes, now that i read it...mine sux ass...but if i actually thought about it i could maybe make a cool one

Day after day i know its true
i reach for the green light
my goals created for you
i held on tight with all my might
the vision of our love
from the day we met
i struggle to reach above
as i have been gone and now returned
you found another
as i have learned
you rejected me before
but i long for you to see me now
i have it all and much more
as i wait for you to see
how i became
The Great Gatsby



I made this poem according to the book the Great Gatsby in memory of Jay Gatsby and his love of Daisy

i love this. probably because i loved the book. but this is great

same. the book was amazing,
as was your verse pakman.

to Kami: the book was great.
i didn't much like the movie though.
it was alot like most other movies
based on books. it sucked out.
left out a lot of detail and,
in the end, it failed miserably.

your opinion?

i read them.its sound good

i thought the movie helped put the book into perspective, because its hard to visualize the scenery when reading the book.

what!!!!!1 they had a great gatsby movie!? answer mehh now!!!

i love great gatsby...i used to sing guitar songs about great gatsby pretending to be him singing a song about daisy...cause i'm weird? lol

anyways, i knew u guys wouldnt think my poem is too terrible since its after such a great book

This post was edited by pakman666 on Feb 11 2008 09:41pm

i guess ur right.
idk, i myself like to just
imagine things as
i read. makes it more
interesting that way.

and yes, pakman,
there is a
Great Gatsby movie
in circulation.
check ur local video store.