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#11
Sep 25 2009 06:04pm
Its not bad, quite... touching, as i can relate to it.
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#12
Dec 3 2009 07:28pm
thank you very much for the feed back!
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#13
Dec 11 2009 11:37pm
Quote (succulentdesire @ Sep 24 2009 01:07pm)
i like the last two lines :) the only thing is I think the word you wanted to use was wander not wonder


So much criticism from you. Post something so we can get a great example of how to write properly!

<3 u.
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#14
Dec 11 2009 11:56pm
Quote (onepagememory @ Dec 11 2009 10:37pm)
So much criticism from you. Post something so we can get a great example of how to write properly!

<3 u.


haha <3 u 2

like I mentioned,I'm no poet. I just like to show my opinion in case they like the idea or if I see something that looks wrong just to help. Why don't you write something? You're an amazing writer remember?
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#15
Dec 12 2009 12:09am
Quote (succulentdesire @ Dec 11 2009 10:56pm)
haha <3 u 2

like I mentioned,I'm no poet. I just like to show my opinion in case they like the idea or if I see something that looks wrong just to help. Why don't you write something? You're an amazing writer remember?


Nah. I don't want people complaining about sticky keyboards once I post something :P
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#16
Dec 12 2009 12:13am
Quote (onepagememory @ Dec 11 2009 11:09pm)
Nah. I don't want people complaining about sticky keyboards once I post something :P


lol'd

baboso :)

hmmm. maybe I'll post something of yours to get jsp's opinion on it :P
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#17
Dec 12 2009 12:19am
Quote (succulentdesire @ Dec 11 2009 11:13pm)
lol'd

baboso :)

hmmm. maybe I'll post something of yours to get jsp's opinion on it :P


Do it and I kill snaky.
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#18
Dec 12 2009 12:20am
Quote (onepagememory @ Dec 11 2009 11:19pm)
Do it and I kill snaky.


* gasp!!* You wouldn't dare...

You touch her and you die. I'll throw matthew on you in the middle of the night.
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#19
Dec 12 2009 12:21am
Quote (succulentdesire @ Dec 11 2009 11:20pm)
* gasp!!* You wouldn't dare...

You touch her and you die. I'll throw matthew on you in the middle of the night.


Stop spamming woman. You're going to get a 10% warn.
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#20
Dec 22 2009 01:34am
It has no flow which annoys me a lot in poetry.
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