i like how you rhymed. The topic of the poem(s?) really depressing, you need jesus;D The words already have a musical ring to them which makes it not seem quite so suicidal. If you wanted to express yourself honestly you did a good job it makes me want to give you a hug lol. One thing, i think facade is pronounced fuss-odd so when i read it, the nice rhyming kinda halted there. If it is actually fuh kade then neeevermind lol. i think like 2 words could be changed to make it better (ice, second be in last one) but in all, this would make a reeeaaally nice song

not badly written, but seriously, they are very emo. try mixing it up a bit, eh?

This post was edited by darcanegel on Jan 5 2009 07:07pm

Nice man i liked it alot..check out some of my stuff not really the same style..maybe you will like lmk what you think

http://forums.d2jsp.org/index.php?showtopic=26901572&f=266

nope

It is pronounced fas-ard, but its in integral part of what i wanted to get across, so i left it knowing that it wasnt too out of place to ruin the flow of the writing.


I laugh at any one who tries to label anything like this, it is writing about my own inner demons, emo is an overused term that is used to describe anything dark which is bullshit.
The core of who we are is pain, no one could function without it, stop using petty labels to describe something so vast and difficult to comprehend.


This post was edited by Plaguefear on Jan 12 2009 08:52pm

>.<

Very nice..
I got chills from a few of them.

Labyrinth is an awesome guild, glad you appreciate my writing, might pop over to your guild chat and say hi to marie and the others.

This post was edited by Plaguefear on Jan 25 2009 06:59pm

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