Thanks for the input.

BAD BOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO

Hey I had a read, they we're goood I like the first one the most

So yeah...Im going to post some more soon.

Written:January 26th, 2008


I cant breathe
The throb in my head
The depression in my heart
All this pain, I can't contain

There is no window in this room I call my mind
So how do I escape?
If only I could walk through these walls
that constrict my body with chaos and confusion

Can you make it right?
Can you make it better?
You won't?Why not?

I thought I had it all
I thought everything was fine
Once again I come to find
I have no self stability
within my mind.

Im stuck in the middle
I can't get out
I have no way of knowing
Help me figure things out


Should I cry or just not even care?
The answers were so clear but
now they are like morning fog on a cloudy day.

Just let me float to the end of time
There, I might just find-
stability that has always escaped the confinements
of my mind.

hey how bout this one...i never was a poet but let me try:


I look into your eyes
deep in your heart
all full of lies
How you hurt me
with silence and secrets
i grab my chest
feel the throbbing
through my sweater vest
why would you
how could you
as the words echo
through the darknest
i am alone

I think they are ok....

i dont like it so much... sorry, but u are good person

loved em

Hailey's Sorrow.

i liked this but it seemd like you were writing just to make it rhyme.
didn't flow to well 5/10

I Act
didn't care for the way this ended. i liked the middle but it ended to abruptly imo.
6/10


Well?.
again the ending threw this one off completly. it was great until the end
6/10


Tell me
i really liked this one. idk why, but i just do. 8/10

Today and Now
dont like the end. it was simple and nice, but the last 2 lines were awkward 6/10

This post was edited by Kamikizzle on Feb 5 2008 11:31pm