Hey, thanks for stopping by.
I need help with the english i wrote below, it's to an application to study outside my original country (where only talking english is req.)
Okey, i would like someone to read and point out my mistakes and tell me possible solutions.
Prohaps help with an ending (like thanks for reading, student [name] is what im thinking)

"Hello reader, that I know nothing about, here is a little something about me:
I’m a young man, 22 years
I enjoy sport and training of most kind, were bicycle is my main training.
I’m easy going, and open minded, which had lead me to try alot of different hobbies (football, swimming, badminton, handball, poker, mediation, cooking).
My newest interest is cooking, where I stripe to get better from the beginner level I posses now. I’m still exploring all the different tastes and possibilities that food has.
Body language is a very fascinating subject that draws my attention, it’s an ability I used a lot of time on improving and I’m no way near mastering this art of understanding people signals. The interest started from playing poker a few years back, where this intuition skill is a must have."

Thanks alot, fellow jsp'er

where
meditation
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Hello reader, WHO I know nothing about.

People/persons are who
Things are that

"Hello reader, who I know nothing about, here is a little something about me:
I'm a 22-year-old male.
I enjoy participating in many sports and most types of training, especially cycling.
I am an easygoing and open-minded person, which has led me to try numerous hobbies; such as, football, swimming, badminton, handball, poker, mediation, and cooking.
My newest interest has been cooking. Although I am only a beginner, I strive to improve as I continue to cook. I’m still exploring the abounding different tastes and combinations within the culinary field.
Another fascination of mine is body language and nonverbal cueing. It’s an ability that I have used a lot, yet I am still improving on my mastery of understanding such signals. The interest started while playing poker a few years prior. Poker, a game where aptitude of body language is a must have."'

Edit: just my thoughts.

This post was edited by Kayak on Apr 24 2013 02:11pm

Thanks, for helping - i appriciate it.


Ty for spotting this.


Thanks, will be using this.

Will check in, 1 more time in a few hours if anything should show up - i'm happy the outcome thanks guys and girls.
Wish ya a awesome day

This post was edited by IronBird on Apr 24 2013 09:35pm

The edits people provided are horrible.

for starters

Hello reader whom I know nothing about. Here is a little something about myself:

No, it's who in this case and not whom.

Go Google how to use who vs whom.

'Who' is used as a subject; 'whom' is used as an object and in prepositional phrases.

What is the question being answered? To be honest, most of it sounds like a really terrible answer...