Hey guys!

Im not sure where to post this... so i thought i'd post it here as it is a short story/movie.

I'd like some feedback on the production of the story both regarding the video and the audio however

the audio aspect is the most important part of my project as im doing a Music Tech course and so the video just acts as the base for the audio in my situation.

I made the video as quickly as possible in order to have more time to work on the audio aspect of it, that kinda explains why the story is a bit boring.

Please watch in the highest quality if possible and leave a comment either in the topic or on youtube! i dont mind criticism of any sort as long as its within reason.

i tried to masturbate to it....but i didnt cum...

i didnt cum..

i don't really get the point of this tbh?

The point of it was to record sound effects and make music to suit the visual. its the kind of job seen in anime films for example
where u got something drawn and u have to put sound effects, ambiance and music on top of the drawings so that it is perceived as being real...

pls if u dont have any constructive criticism to share or u r extremely confused as to what the purpose of the video is refrain from posting anything at all.

It's bad, really bad.


Constructive enough?

You'll probably get better feedback at a site like that deviantart place or cgtalk. I am a gamer and expect any cinema/video to be at a professional "blizzard" level and give me instant gratification when i play or watch something, so I probably can't give the kind of artistic feedback that will help you.

That said, the narration kind of put me to sleep. There's a difference between telling someone a story and showing them. Like the part where the narrator says "he heard monsters in the trees", but when you listen to it, I didn't really hear any monsters. The narrator was just telling me he heard monsters in the trees but I didn't get to hear it for myself.

Too much narration imo, show me don't tell me. Not a whole lot of environmental/ambient sounds and noises that add to the mood and surroundings.

Art fields are difficult because an average no-talent joe like me can tell when a video, drawing, or painting isn't blizzard quality. You can kick my ass at sound effects and video and you're way better than me at it, but all I've been watching these past few years is blizzard quality stuff, so I can tell when something isn't quite up to that level yet. You've chosen a difficult field, good luck in your career bro!

I don't think you know what the word constructive means so i'ma go with no

Might want to brush up on sarcasm.

Also, if you want to start the term "destructive enough?" please go ahead. But it won't be me that does it.

You did a good job imo
Where did you source the sound effects and commentary?

Did you have to record all of your own audio?

Also, jsp isn't renound for friendly advice or constructive criticism.

Might I suggest submitting to a reddit sub, you'll get much better feedback there