hey im writing a song for my guitar class
ive been playing actively for 2 years but mostly learning scales/chords/techniques and playing covers...never really done any writing besides improvising

anyways heres how it goes:

intro: G2 C D Dsus
verse1: E C G D Dsus
chorus: Am F G C C/B
Outro: G2 Cadd9 G2



i want to change up the Dsus Am from verse 1 to chorus, i feel like it just doesnt sound right...
i also want to add a bridge and more verses, and i need to make a solo.(what fret is the tone of G)

thanks and ANY feedback on here or youtube is appreciated!!

This post was edited by T3H on May 11 2011 03:08pm

The reason the Dsus to Am sounds off is because you're actually changing keys from Em to Am and the Dsus sets you up to go back to a root of Em.

One thing I heard was on the fourth repetition of the verse you could go to C for 2 beats and then to E major or G major for 2 beats (The E major has a more exotic sound there but I think it sounds kinda cool). The reason for the E before the Am is it sets you up to expect the Am because, if you know some theory, that would be a V - i progression which is a strong progression while the Dsus doesn't set you up for a key change to Am. The G major is more or less just a substitution that does the same thing but may or may not be as effective.

That's just my take of course. Maybe you don't even want a key change and just want to stay in E minor/G major, idk.

Thanks bro! I am going to re-read this later on, and it should help very much!
this is the kind of feedback i like to hear!

i will probably be pming you later on once i put this together again!!

have a melody?

not yet

updated it a little bit
any feedback is still greatly appreciated!