Keep in mind, the instrumental is not mine, and im rapping through a headset, all the lyrics are mine and self wrote, let me know!

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=sWY018ues-Y

Good job and keep up the good work

7/10

no offense but why is this in muscicians chat? rapping may be difficult and take talent but it has no musical qualities other than its background music, which are usually all done by a computer.

Just because someone does something digitally doesn't mean they are not a musician.



On topic. I don't really feel the song.

It isn't very articulate.
It's very generic.

the lyrics are decent, but I can tell your just beginning -- they will get better over time.

Flow is decent too but can be touched up.

Your delivery is kind of bland... a lot of parts, I could tell you were reading off paper. Just put more emotion into it Rap it from the heart!

As far as annunciation goes, I would practice your verses a bit more before keeping the final recording -- perfect them a little more... but sound out the words fully, some seemed mummbled. It may not seem that way to you, because you know your own lyrics 100%. But to other people who don't, you just have to make sure you annunciation is on point best as possible.


the "changes" repeating part, you should not have added that... took a lot away from the song, unfortunately.