Sleepless nights, to never know who you are
Sleepless nights, to never get far
The senses you can never seek
Feeling distraught, I know what you mean
Born to be stranded all alone
Your heart is your will to be gone


Days go by, but the sun can never shine
Days go by, how I wish to get a piece of your mind
Walking towards to the end of your life
Never knowing how it is to be alive
I hope you'll find your way
Your heart will never cease to decay


Rock lyrics btw.

This post was edited by Cosinus on Jan 29 2010 07:36pm

Instead of "can't never" replace it with "can't ever" - double negative and sounds weird.

hmmm must be a typo

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I like the lyrics and even was able to incorporate them into a rhythm guitar riff to get a better "feel" of them.

well, ty,

it's about a person being "depressive" :0

I haven't finished it yet, I still have to decide wether or not to put a chorus and add more lyrics ;/

You won't need a chorus if you just have an epic third verse along with some epic guitar playing to top off the song and give it a nice finish.

That's exactly what I was thinking,

I was thinking of putting the Days go By verse @ the end, and putting a mid verse btw those two

That's a lot of "nevers". Some songs can get by with having a lot of repetition, others cannot. If you can get it to work, then more power to you. Just keep it in mind that usuaully frequent repetition of a word doesn't work.

I think it works with the 2 lines at the start but i agree that the 3rd line shouldn't have it as well. try "can't ever" as suggested in the first post maybe