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Aug 28 2008 09:20pm
this is a song about a soldiers struggle and a mother pain.. its a ballad.. i liek to believe its a powerful 1.. personally when i hear it sung and played i get a chill down my spine.. but final copy of song isnt on this comp so all i got are lyrics.. still will u rate them for me?



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a whisper of promise onto infant ears
hero worship is all that he hears
love, caring, and memories lost
pride and glory but at what cost
innocence in his soul has been torn
all that's left is a mother to mourn

shattering pain as he breaths his last breathe
all that he sees is a vision of death
looking for mercy he screams to the skys
as his mother sits at the window and cries
a boy of eighteen that noone believed
lieing in a casket waiting to be grieved

hatred boils from the pits of hell
as the mother that mourns continues to tell
all those around her, her son was a king
the fateful shot of the rifle did ring
the life of a soldier is very short lived
giving their life till nothings left to give


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distance yourself from the gun
never thought we would run
soldiers dieing left and right
enemies always in their sight
war is carnage,death, and sorrow
never waking to see tomorrow
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Aug 28 2008 10:10pm
Very sad lyrics, but very good, imo.
The only part I don't understand is "Hatred boils from the pits of Hell".....what does Hell have to do with the soldier or his mother? What about something along the lines of "Heaven wept as a good man fell" or something involving Heaven instead of Hell?
Just my 2 cents, though, you're the artist. smile.gif
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Aug 28 2008 10:30pm
Quote (IrishGoddess69 @ Fri, Aug 29 2008, 04:10am)
Very sad lyrics, but very good, imo.
The only part I don't understand is "Hatred boils from the pits of Hell".....what does Hell have to do with the soldier or his mother? What about something along the lines of "Heaven wept as a good man fell" or something involving Heaven instead of Hell?
Just my 2 cents, though, you're the artist. smile.gif


well.. all hate is supposed to come from hell.. and a parent that has lost a child slowly starts to feel the hate inside as "why did my child get killed and urs didnt" sets in.. therefore i used to manerisms of hell as a powerful figurative speech
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Aug 29 2008 12:49am
Nice.. and sadly.
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Aug 29 2008 07:59am
man thats gfg

extent of my song talents are
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I got sumthin in my front pocket. For youuuu.
sumthin in my front pocket...
sumthin in my front pocket...
for youuuu...
why dont you come over hear and see what it isssss.
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Aug 29 2008 07:55pm
Quote (Unborn_Kid @ Sat, Aug 30 2008, 12:26am)
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ok normally i can figure these out but WHAT THE HELL does that mean lol
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Quote (The_Pillo @ Fri, 29 Aug 2008, 21:55)
ok normally i can figure these out but WHAT THE HELL does that mean lol


I think he means brutal. Very nice lyrics though.
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Quote (GrkDude @ Mon, Sep 1 2008, 02:19pm)
I think he means brutal. Very nice lyrics though.


oooo that makes ALOT more sense lol

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