Hey everyone.
I think I just put the finishing touches on my song.
Here's the lyrics for all to read, comment/criticize etc.

Meeting up next week with a friends band.
I'll get them to make the tunes and sing it etc.

If anyone has anything helpful they would like to add.
Please don't hesitate.



Aspects


"One step forwards
Takes me 10 steps back

Life keeps pushing me down
Keep it all inside
I never really made a sound

But now I'm fighting my way to the top
Heart's just telling me to stop

Because every time I step forwards
She sends me 10 steps back"


-chorus-

"I'm going to step up
Seize the day

Find a way
To make it better
To seize this day
And treat you like no other"


"Living feels like dreaming
And somehow
I see myself sitting on the edge
Waiting for a new day

Tell me who will save me
And I'll find you

And when this is all over
I'll never leave your side"


"I'm going to step up
Seize the day

Find a way
To make it better
To seize this day
And treat you like no other"

-Narative Style-
"You realise when you go through the hardest parts of your life, who your real friends are, and
how far they would go for you.
In the end.
It's the people that you may have thought were just, standing on the sidelines, that will
reveal themselves as your savior."

Nobody wants to give me an opinion on how bad it is?

"I'm going to step up
Seize the day

doesnt' sound smooth when i hear it...but i don't know how u sing it so i can't give any more suggestions.

I think I ended up changing "step" to "rise"
Thanks.

Music plz i need to music damnit lyrics are easier than GOOD melody.

band is working on music