I really like the instrumental you used, and the lyrics are solid poetry. I can appreciate the context, and I think your annunciation of words could be a lot clearer. It kind of sounds like you're straining to get the words out. I would recommend regulating your breath, in quickly through the mouth, and slowly out as you speak in order to get a lot more power. Moving your lips a little more will make the message clear too. Besides a little polish on your vocal technique this is a great mood for a heartbreaker rap. Keep up the good work, good lyrics and dont stop!

Peace

This post was edited by kundalini on Jun 20 2010 06:24pm

Generic ass classic rock = bottom of the barrel musicians with no creativity or talent. Anyway, that was a pretty good song, and your rapping added a lot to it.

Thank you very much for some conctructive critisim and yeah well recording was also done thru a laptop mic. not the best

thanks alot man!!

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check this from the non ''talented'' band.

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=OzMJhOwBLqw

This post was edited by Schizophrenia on Jun 28 2010 04:17am

Learn to read.

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