d2jsp
Log InRegister
d2jsp Forums > Off-Topic > Entertainment Room > Musicians Chat > A Start To A Sad Song > First Serious One
Prev12
Add Reply New Topic New Poll
Member
Posts: 104,403
Joined: Jun 22 2007
Gold: 121,790.00
Sep 13 2008 09:00pm
Quote (ZaftigFetus @ Sat, 13 Sep 2008, 22:58)
great lyrics
try to work on the beat and definitly continue wink.gif


worken on the lyrics to fit the beat now, the beat isn't mine so can't really work on that too much except give it a nice flow. tongue.gif
Member
Posts: 5,795
Joined: Oct 29 2007
Gold: 3,005.18
Sep 13 2008 11:04pm
i think it was prety good but dont like the beat that much.
Member
Posts: 1,469
Joined: Sep 7 2008
Gold: 0.00
Sep 15 2008 12:19am
Quote (element104954 @ Sat, Sep 13 2008, 08:54am)
THIS IS NOT MY BEAT SO DON'T STEAL IT, I GIVE NOONE PERMISSION.. if you wanna use it ask him yourself.. lol


http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=zIfDZ_ww0CY


a start to it all.. almost done with the first verse..

kaya (my sister) do you even remember when your father was alive?
do you remember his anger, his pain, but his sensitive side?
i don't think you do, i don't think you ever have, cause you were only 2 when he passed.
i feel so bad, you'll never meet the one you used to call dad
if only you could remember what i now call the past
i still remember his yell to his laugh, his spelling to his math
and you were the only thing left that he had, besides his gun and a pocket full of crack
it's just a damn shame that he had to go out like that...
it's sad when i can say he was the best father figure i ever had, better than my own dad...
i remember this one time he robbed some store guess what he grabbed
diapers and baby forumula, not cash, for his baby daughter at home screamen for her dad...



please be respectful.. it's all a true story but i would like some constructive criticism so far cause I'm at the point where i can still change things around and what not. the story behind it is, my mom dated him when they were in highschool, he went to jail for like 14 years or something crazy like that for accidentally killing someone. when he got out, they had my half sister. about 2 ish years later he died on an OD in one of his scumbag friends house. now my sister is 7.



im not gonna lye it has potential
Member
Posts: 104,403
Joined: Jun 22 2007
Gold: 121,790.00
Sep 15 2008 04:31pm
Quote (OranjeMan @ Mon, 15 Sep 2008, 02:19)
im not gonna lye it has potential


thanks, i actually finished the first verse so it goes with the beat nicely and have a chorus.. now for a 2nd verse and ill worry about recording it biggrin.gif
Banned
Posts: 36,838
Joined: Apr 18 2008
Gold: 7.36
Warn: 20%
Sep 30 2008 09:05pm
potential beat.
Banned
Posts: 767
Joined: Sep 20 2008
Gold: 0.71
Warn: 30%
Sep 30 2008 10:10pm
stealing it and selling it on itunes now















































































oh wait nobody is going to buy it anyway

This post was edited by Ziggy_s on Sep 30 2008 10:10pm
Member
Posts: 14,372
Joined: Aug 26 2008
Gold: 813.00
Oct 1 2008 09:16pm
use vst plugins and discover new sounds imo
Go Back To Musicians Chat Topic List
Prev12
Add Reply New Topic New Poll