This isn't about the raps about jsp.. so idc about your opinions on those for now.

I do songs in the "Real life" aspect also.

But anyways, to the point.. long story short, me and my friend made a diss track about someone (still waiting on the response)
There will be another one...

What I need from you is your honest opinion on what can or could have been done better just as a future reference.
If you think it's trash.. I need you to back up your reasoning.. if you think it's godly or whatever, I need you to back up your reasoning.

So far, my few friends that rap said I killed him already.. but they didn't really give me feedback. I mean, their opinions matter since they are really good.. but I think I'd get more honest opinions from people who aren't my friends irl, you know?

So post here.. nn flaming.. I want it to be constructive.
I'll pm you the link.

I'm not a rapper or a fan at all really, but let's see it anyway.

I'll listen to it, even tho I'm not a fan or rap.

Why don't u just post the link here btw?

To avoid unnecessary flaming.

shoot it to me and I'll let you know.

Just got his response... so opinions would be cool.

Mine:

http://www.soundclick.com/bands/page_songInfo.cfm?bandID=900327&songID=7576271

His:

http://www.soundclick.com/bands/page_songInfo.cfm?bandID=900327&songID=7576263

This post was edited by element104954 on May 5 2009 02:35pm

PM me i'll see, i write songs by my self and love rap

Wasn't a fan of either...

Ur beats were way better.. He didnt do anything good tbh, you killed him imo.. props.. Btw u sound pretty good

I think you did a better job on the instrumental, except your rap sounds WAY too much like plain talking dude. Give it some flow, your friend's rap sounded better vocally -- lyrically, idk, imo didn't like either of ur lyrics.