i only recorded it once too lazy to do it again im super impatient haha so there are a few mistakes but not too bad.. imo let me know what you think

I think you posted this in the wrong forum, for one. Musicians Chat is that way. I also think you should try covering something with a little more substance, metalcore riffs and all that chugging crap isn't much fun to play.

Try covering this instead. Solos might be a bit much for you, but the riffs are lots of fun :

mm i dont really like it that much the recording is kinda sloppy

this is better =] yw