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Apr 14 2012 05:32pm
This is a song i did for my upcoming mixtape, its a rap song but im just putting it out there for people to listen to. I'm a white rapper part of a group but i did this one solo. Just lookin for some feedback.


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Apr 16 2012 06:38pm
intros a bit too long and the way you say headhunters in the intro makes it seem like you have downs syndrome
be more aggressive with your lines from 0:30 to 1:00
after 1:00 you start to rap more clearly and aggressive, but everything before that is way too passive.

overall pretty good

"breaking legs and breaking spines" ...we goin head huntin.

should be " BREAKING LEGS AND BREAKING SPINES" WE GOIN HEADDD HUNTINN

has alot of potential.
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