k well spacing shit the bed but here it is
http://pastebin.com/9XnvX3W1
worth a C?
OR WORTH MORE??????? LMK SO I CAN SEND EMAIL TO THE BITCH

This post was edited by dude150 on Apr 6 2011 05:34pm

A for effort

and you shoulda done POp with friday as the main song analyzed

This post was edited by garbo on Apr 6 2011 05:30pm

isn't all music man-made? that sentence sucks


looks like a run on sentence, also what the fuck is negativities, poor word choice


another run on bro, also this sentence is horrible, common perception and stereotype mean the same thing, you don't need the first part between Due and genre


this is the 3rd time you stated this thought


that's just the first paragraph, want me to go on?

SIGH KIDS THESE DAYS

comments are:
"Not a strong opening statement" pointing to my first sentence
and then at the end of the paper "You did not use Chicago style footnotes as instructed on the assignment sheet. Good ideas + discussion but needs more focus in beginning"

if good ideas and discussion y u giv C tho?

This post was edited by dude150 on Apr 6 2011 05:33pm

atleast a B+ because you didn't focus on just one type of sub genre (aka right a paper on only what you think is good like most people would)

I do see a few holes here and there where it seems like you missed a word or something perhaps that was the grammar part.

Also whats with the numbering and what not, never written a paper that looked anything like that before.

ya man your intro blew dick lol the first two sentences were a sorta no brainer

shoulda gone with something like:

Since the invention of music there have been many variations and change which have allowed for the development of many different genre's of music.


/e goig to play a game

This post was edited by garbo on Apr 6 2011 05:38pm

Your first sentence is weak. I thought about commenting on it but it was a concise thought unlike the rest the paragraph.

I bet if you talked to the guy, he'd dry anally rape your paper more than I did. There's probably more justification of the C grade, he was just being somewhat nice.

bro i began it the day it was due
had no time to do more than type it and read through it once



yeah the numbering is from the site
there should be hardly any numbers, only for my citations

Oh and I just noticed you didn't really bring in the counter of religious metal into the paper at all, saying how there is a branch of christians who actually don't appose it. Theres a shit ton of christian thrash / metalcore / etc.

that was pretty obvious, and hence the C grade