Hi Phunk,
This is definitely heading in the direction I like. Overall, I really like the concept and atmosphere you've created.
The only changes I'd suggest are:
Maybe add some brighter clouds or light effects in the background to create a bit more contrast and depth.
The red and blue particles/effects could be a little more intense so they stand out more.
I'm not fully sold on the current text style yet. Would it be possible to add "Pure Ownage" underneath the name and perhaps take some inspiration from the font/style used in my current signature? I really like the look and feel of that text.
Other than those small adjustments, I think it looks great and is very close to what I'm looking for.
Thanks, I really like the direction this is going!
Let me know if this is possible and what the cost would be.