Expand more on it the black is way too distracting cause it has too much presence

Head wear looks really out of place in this, try removing all the rough edges

too much negative space, blur the really hard edges out

dunno what to do with the background
anybetter?

First version was better. You need to work on your composition and overall execution/presentation, but this is pretty close to being good

Yours is absolutely terrible Sir. I wouldn't criticize his work since it's a hundred percent better than yours.

here we go again

could you just go and.. i don't know.. kill yourself?