allow me

Antal you went way to heavy with the lighting, and waaay to many sparkles.
your bg choice actually is kinda nice. should probably blur it just a tad.
Your render choice could be better, but i suppose its alright. Its over-sharpened.
Theres alot of yellow as well, which isnt really a BAD thing.. but in this case, its not a good thing.
try working with more color. purple, oranges, reds maybe.
From other things that you have made its an improvement, but not by much.
Dont use text. Its only hurting your work at this point.

as for mitch, the lighting on yours is also waaay to bright. tone it down a bit
I dont know what it is, maybe a photofilter or gradient, but theres an awful blue tone on everything, drowning out the colors.
Your render is on the right but my eyes keep looking at the signs on the left, your bg is clashing with your focal. Mainly because the light source is drowning out your render.
The effects feel very random and misplaced, theres no real "flow" to speak of. try working more on one side of the signature.
Overall you really need to work more on your placement.

for both of you, try following the tut exactly. Its a tutorial.. don't be afraid to make it look exactly the same.
In fact, the closer it looks to the tuts outcome.. the better.
Just follow the tut point to point, unless magi-poo says otherwise.

Also, kudos to everyone whos submitted. I applaud your effort to learn.

This post was edited by DB_odin on Aug 29 2011 08:53pm

i agree with everything Odin said, give it another shot with that advice and i think the results will be much better

Thank you, new bits, and ya.
Did the tutorial.

gg thread just noticed u used my tut
glad to people attempting to
if anyone have question about the bad engrish in it just pm me or ask magi he'll prob know how to explain it better too

to add a few really good sites for signature or gfx related stuff you might check out GFXresource or sigresorce dot coms there really good sites

nice brah
outcomes not bad either

gotta contribute, can never learn to much.

B4 i took a random render yea, this time loooked for a better one of my likings...

my biggest problem is the gradient feels too strong in this, her skin has a very strange color to it, a nice part of this tut is the end result keeps the human color of his skin
the effects look fine, but the windows in the bg seem pretty bright, which doesn't really match the lighting on her so it is somewhat strange when i look closer
i'd also move the girl a bit to the right as well to get it away from the center




the render is oversharpened in this one, otherwise id say the bg and effects seem to flow much better compared to earlier
its definitely better in the color area as well, the yellow was too strong and now the colors work together






i'd go with the first one myself, i think this is a good result because the focal and flow are obvious and easy to follow and the effects don't really fight either of them.
the one weird part for me is the knight looking guy with the dog in the bottom left area, somewhat confused there, but i like the computer bg on the right

This post was edited by TheReborn_Magi on Aug 30 2011 09:20am

yeah, i liked the tut because it includes a lot of things like color, lighting, c4ds, placement, bg/render harmony, flow that are all important to learn together compared to having tons of different tuts.