Quote (Strickland @ 10 Feb 2020 09:54)

I'm no music expert, but I feel like the vocals are really quiet.

The music drowns out your voice. Is this intentional, or an equipment issue?

Quote (AlPuccino @ 10 Feb 2020 10:18)

is it you rapping? well yeh like he said u should be signing louder and with more emotion like u were in the trenches lol or else this is pretty good in my opinion

Quote (triumvirate @ 10 Feb 2020 10:21)

This isn't my genre by any means, but for what it's worth here are my thoughts.

I really like the sample you've used here. The mournful piano pairs well with the tone of the lyrics you've written.
The tracks flows very well and you definitely have vocal talent in terms of your delivery and emotion.
Instead of the 'luxray beats' branding playing over your lyrics in the middle, maybe save it for the outro or a purely instrumental section like you did at the start.
Definitely prioritize investing in a home studio mic setup, there are some good recommendations to be found on youtube from voice acting professionals and musicians. You can probably get a more than good enough setup for $100-$150 then it's just a case of basic soundproofing which could be as simple as some pillows and blankets.

Good luck, even though it's not my favorite genre I enjoyed the track. :)

Quote (Zinaga @ Feb 10 2020 09:09am)

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