Quote (TortoiseBox @ Jul 31 2016 05:38am)
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=_-BQ9h_jIEw
The gentleman in the film would be me.
Would be? What would make him you?
Anyways, it was good except for a few things. As pointed out the early resets don't make a lot if sense but that is perfectly OK for an amateur project while you are learning. The major thing I personally didn't like was the dialogue. I think not giving any sound to the characters could have made the film stronger.
Having the first noises from a character be a tantrum and then the only dialogue be "your beautiful" "i love you(etc)" " im breaking up with you" is not only cheesy but also destroys the feeling/tone the rest of the sound is working on through out the entire film.
Non-verbal story telling such as him dropping the flowers and leaving might have worked better for me.