external flash or internal flash?
if external you can just use a basic white card to bounce light/soften it.
cropping is a bit tight on right and top sides, thats why the shadow is a bit of a problem, also because the light is so direct.
the text should be lowered to about his shoulders, (because of the cropping/framing)
camera should be eye level, seems little under.
but yeah if client is ok, doesnt matter.