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Oct 21 2011 06:45am
The desert,
Soaked
By the gusts of wind
Which currents have caused
Sand, moist
And smooth
As if time has stopped
Letting each grain fall one at a time
Through each fiber of your finger tips
No friction,
Only descending onto the next grain
The next piece, which forms the mound you are standing on

The ocean,
Dry
By the current flowing beneath your arms,
Casting the air through every void within the waves
Every droplet hurled by what lies in the distance
Dripping upon your face,
Your body, though your cloths do not dampen
Limbs do not become cold

The air,
Still
Hear the screaming winds around
No movement in sight
A whistle behind you,
Breeze in front,
Only to catch you
Plummeting deep into the unknown,
Where the is no desert, no water, no air

Unknown,
Drifting
That is all you can do
There is no destination
No end to your journey.
All amongst you,
Is you.
Alone
With your thoughts.
With no present
No future.
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Nov 12 2011 12:49am
I like it..very descriptive made me feel like I was there in the desert and the ocean and the air.. However I like my poems to flow and rhyme which yours doesent really do that :(

STill very nice tho. Gl
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Nov 12 2011 12:30pm
Thanks for your thoughts, I do have a few that flow better and rhyme but lately I've been moving away from that just to change things up a bit. I feel as though I am able to describe things better when I am not stuck with having to rhyme parts of the poem, but that is just me xD
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Nov 19 2011 05:18am
gj
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Nov 19 2011 10:51am
Quote (ToysRus @ Nov 19 2011 07:18am)
gj


ty xD
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Nov 24 2011 01:09pm
are you by any chance waiting for diablo 3?
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Nov 24 2011 02:55pm
Quote (Qwerty666Hacked @ Nov 24 2011 03:09pm)
are you by any chance waiting for diablo 3?


^Is something giving that away xD
yes I cannot wait for diablo 3, love the diablo story, and love the cinematic's in each game which makes me want it more to be able to see everything unfold
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Nov 30 2011 08:05am
Your wrote this?.

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Nov 30 2011 10:36am
Quote (EsG_Accidents @ Nov 30 2011 10:05am)
Your wrote this?.


Yes I did write this xD
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Dec 29 2011 04:26am
You have air, water, and earth but no fire! I would like to get all my elements in one sit please. I like it thanks for sharing.
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